general commentary citation + dates review for official disco

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@@ -73,7 +73,7 @@ Commentary: |-
 
     The first "fake band" album. Composed and performed by the Midnight Crew. Or it would have been if they were real.
 
-    <i>Michael Guy Bowman:</i>
+    <i>Michael Guy Bowman:</i> ([Music and Stuff](https://web.archive.org/web/20110326020456/http://www.iambowman.com/music.html))
 
     The Midnight Crew album was the first of our really high-concept releases with the fake bands, especially since we attempted to invent some kind of goth-jazz genre out of thin air, despite the team's minimal understanding of goth music or jazz.
 
@@ -256,11 +256,9 @@ URLs:
 - https://homestuck.bandcamp.com/track/lunar-eclipse-2
 - https://youtu.be/06SVUSwu8Xk
 Commentary: |-
-    <i>Michael Guy Bowman:</i> (co-composer, from [Music and Stuff](https://web.archive.org/web/20110326020456/http://www.iambowman.com/music.html))
+    <i>Michael Guy Bowman:</i> ([Music and Stuff](https://web.archive.org/web/20110326020456/http://www.iambowman.com/music.html))
 
-    The <i>Midnight Crew</i> album was the first of our really high-concept releases with the fake bands, especially since we attempted to invent some kind of goth-jazz genre out of thin air, despite the team's minimal understanding of goth music or jazz. I opted to imitate Weather Report and the sort of spacey, insidious-sounding grooves they put together on Mysterious Traveler to create "Lunar Eclipse". I like the atmospheric nature of the track, plus Fenris' sax solo that I diced up and added a ton of digital reverb to, although Fenris has completely disappeared since recording the solo in 2009.
-
-    *(Continued in [[Hauntjam]]!)*
+    I opted to imitate Weather Report and the sort of spacey, insidious-sounding grooves they put together on Mysterious Traveler to create "Lunar Eclipse". I like the atmospheric nature of the track, plus Fenris' sax solo that I diced up and added a ton of digital reverb to, although Fenris has completely disappeared since recording the solo in 2009.
 
     <i>Michael Guy Bowman:</i> (Bowmantown Discord, excerpt, 8/5/2017)
 
@@ -290,9 +288,7 @@ Commentary: |-
 
     Hauntjam and Hauntjelly are interesting things. They were actually made based on [[track:haunt-andrew-hussie|a short fruity loop]] that The Big Man Andrew did, called haunt.wav or haunt.mp3 or something like that. A jam on his theme, logically, would therefore be called "hauntjam," with the opportunity for naming puns including [[track:hauntjelly|"hauntjelly."]] His theme appears mostly unchanged as the bassline for the first part of the pieces. At this point in terms of instrumentation, we were still mostly striving for faithfulness to the canon Midnight Crew "band," as can be seen in [the Extras page](http://www.mspaintadventures.com/extras/ps000018.html) wherein the MC fill 'em with midnight (bottom), so Hauntjam employs trombone, string bass, piano, clarinet, and sax (I forget which because I've lost the file and am not a band person, but I think it was alto). From there on, it was fairly straightforward to write a haunting refrain and then solos for each instrument. I will admit I got a little writerblock'd for the second part, which was sort of a brief modulation to the dominant, so it sounds a little strange. But it still has its own little charm, with the almost annoying trill put in for a spooky ghost-like effect. In Hauntjam, Bowman did some good stuff with bringing out moving parts in the first refrain. In Hauntjelly, [[artist:ian-taylor|Xerxes]] emphasizes the spookiness by changing instruments for more electric organ.
 
-    <i>Michael Guy Bowman:</i> (co-composer, from [Music and Stuff](https://web.archive.org/web/20110326020456/http://www.iambowman.com/music.html))
-
-    *(Continued from [[Lunar Eclipse]]!)*
+    <i>Michael Guy Bowman:</i> ([Music and Stuff](https://web.archive.org/web/20110326020456/http://www.iambowman.com/music.html))
 
     I also went ahead a dropped some good synths and fairly convincing drum part on Andrew Huo's "Hauntjam".
 
@@ -338,10 +334,11 @@ URLs:
 - https://homestuck.bandcamp.com/track/ace-of-trump-2
 - https://youtu.be/Leb48RHyrWs
 Commentary: |-
-    <i>Hilary Troiano:</i>
+    <i>Hilary Troiano:</i> ([Tumblr](https://jaydeis.tumblr.com/post/19609363685/someone-sent-me-a-pm-asking-for-some-commentary), 3/19/2012)
+
     Someone sent me a PM asking for some commentary about my two MSPA songs, so [[media:misc/hilary-troiano-commentary.mp3|here it is]]. ([source](https://jaydeis.tumblr.com/post/19609363685/someone-sent-me-a-pm-asking-for-some-commentary))
 
-    <b>Transcript:</b>
+    <i>Hilary Troiano:</i> ([[media:misc/hilary-troiano-commentary.mp3|audio commentary transcript]], 3/19/2012)
 
     So, someone on the MS Paint Adventures Forums asked me if I would be willing to give some commentary on my songs which have appeared on the Homestuck albums. Well, two of them. For those who don't know me, my name is Hilary Troiano, and I'm the artist behind Ace of Trump on the Midnight Crew album and [[track:homefree|Homefree]] on [[album:homestuck-vol-8|Volume 8]]. I'm entirely self taught, I never really took a music theory class or anything, in fact in high school I was trying to learn how to perform music, you know playing trumpet in orchestra... but I wasn't really all that good at it. I spent more of my days in middle school and high school kinda playing around with the music synthesizing program on my computer and I guess somewhere along the way I figured things out.