ferkol citations + commentary cleanup

1 files changed, 9 insertions, 6 deletions

diff --git a/album/homestuck-vol-7.yaml b/album/homestuck-vol-7.yaml
index fe8544d..dfe89f9 100644
--- a/album/homestuck-vol-7.yaml
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@@ -323,21 +323,24 @@ Cover Artists:
 Art Tags:
 - The Expatriate
 Commentary: |-
-    <i>Thomas Ferkol:</i>
-    Havoc to be Wrought was spawned from an idea for a short story I had in my mind about a man climbing the old bell tower of an abandoned church investigating strange sounds that had plagued a small town, only to be forced into a confrontation with the "King of Owls" once he reaches the top, and ending with the KoO cutting the bell rope that the man clung to and screeching in the night.
-    Things changed though.
-    Once I had actually started writing and refining it, I decided to change its message, from a mad owl thing to the mysterious demon in the troll's session which had been recently mentioned in the comic (I wrote this sometime in Fall 2010).  Also, yes, that is why there is distorted owl screeches at the end, although they were more meant to evoke the horrorterrors crying out in pain than owls by the time it was finished.
-    Contains some very powerful organ and some great chord progressions, but also some structural choices I am not completely proud of, which remained in the piece until its release months and months later because the original Finale file crashed on me before I had a chance to save it.  So, rather than attempt reconstructing it, I went with what I had, and it stuck.
+    <i>Thomas Ferkol:</i> (composer, [Tumblr](https://eidolonorpheus.tumblr.com/post/15715289410/eidolons-other-commentary-whatsits), excerpt)
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+    Havoc to be Wrought was spawned from an idea for a short story I had in my mind about a man climbing the old bell tower of an abandoned church investigating strange sounds that had plagued a small town, only to be forced into a confrontation with the "King of Owls" once he reaches the top, and ending with the KoO cutting the bell rope that the man clung to and screeching in the night.  Things changed though.  Once I had actually started writing and refining it, I decided to change its message, from a mad owl thing to the mysterious demon in the troll's session which had been [recently mentioned](https://www.homestuck.com/story/2606) in the comic (I wrote this sometime in Fall 2010).  Also, yes, that is why there is distorted owl screeches at the end, although they were more meant to evoke the horrorterrors crying out in pain than owls by the time it was finished.  Contains some very powerful organ and some great chord progressions, but also some structural choices I am not completely proud of, which remained in the piece until its release months and months later because the original Finale file crashed on me before I had a chance to save it.  So, rather than attempt reconstructing it, I went with what I had, and it stuck.
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+    <i>Thomas Ferkol:</i> (composer, <a href="https://youtu.be/E7pBfnN7b1w">YouTube comments</a>)
 
-    <i>Thomas Ferkol:</i> (<a href="https://youtu.be/E7pBfnN7b1w">YouTube comments</a>)
     Darkleer had no actual connection to my writing of the piece, was actually a Lord English in the outer ring piece. Someone choosing track art just thought he fit for some reason?
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     > WHAT IS THAT TERRIFYING SOUND?! The end of this song is freaking me out.
     Barn Owl put through distortion. Possibly horrorterrors. Who knows, man, who knows..
     > Well I have a stud horse (stallion), and this kind of sounds like him whinnying slowed down.
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     Barn Owl through distortion, was supposed to be horrorterror sounds, but the person gathering art for the album chose this picture.
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     > <p>considering it was originally written about lord english, i'd assume the vast honk?</p>
     > <p><i>...(another commenter)...</i></p>
     > <p>No? We HEAR it, and it's him saying honk, not random screaming that is supposedly a honk</p>
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     Been a while, but the noises are the horrorterrors being slaughtered
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 Track: Play The Wind