erik scheele ruins + vol 9 commentary citations + formatting

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@@ -1247,19 +1247,21 @@ MIDI Project Files:
   Files:
   - 'Ruins (With Strings) - Twix Stix.mid'
 Commentary: |-
-    <i>Erik Scheele:</i> (composer)
+    <i>Erik Scheele:</i> (co-composer)
 
-    This one is really hardly me, honest, it's all Bowman. [[track:ruins|Ruins]] was this piano recording I'd put up back when I still hardly knew how to record anything, and then Bowman just went and added magic to it. And the piano track, that's just another one of those "improvisations out of nowhere", no real purpose or theory-thinking beforehand to delegate anything to it. Especially the descending-thirds, no way I could have just thought about that and been like "Yes that is a good thing to be doing", it was just spur of the moment thinking.
+    This one is really hardly me, honest, it's all [[artist:michael-guy-bowman|Bowman]]. [[track:ruins|Ruins]] was this piano recording I'd put up back when I still hardly knew how to record anything, and then Bowman just went and added magic to it. And the piano track, that's just another one of those "improvisations out of nowhere", no real purpose or theory-thinking beforehand to delegate anything to it. Especially the descending-thirds, no way I could have just thought about that and been like "Yes that is a good thing to be doing", it was just spur of the moment thinking.
 
-    (Ruins was one of the first things I contributed to the music forum after getting on the team, a small improvisation based around descending seconds which was made back when I still had no idea how to record things properly. Since Earth was kind of a gigantic wasteland planet at that point (and it still is, today), I conceptually tied my recording in with that, and called it Ruins.
+    <i>Erik Scheele:</i> (co-composer, [Tumblr](https://erikscheele.tumblr.com/post/21217208124/ruins), excerpt)
 
-    Of course, I really doubt that Ruins would have gotten anywhere if it wasn't for Bowman, who pretty much surprised me sometime before Volume 5 with an updated version of my recording, which made the piano sound better and added a lot of other instruments to it, really adding a lot of depth and atmosphere to an otherwise-shoddy recording. And then, when Volume 5 came around, it was released as "Ruins (With Strings)", which is what you just heard in the update!
+    [[track:ruins|Ruins]] was one of the first things I contributed to the music forum after getting on the team, a small improvisation based around descending seconds which was made back when I still had no idea how to record things properly. Since Earth was kind of a gigantic wasteland planet at that point (and it still is, today), I conceptually tied my recording in with that, and called it Ruins.
 
-    I know I've got a better recording of Ruins kicking around here somewhere, I'll have to see if something can be done with it.)
+    Of course, I really doubt that Ruins would have gotten anywhere if it wasn't for [[artist:michael-guy-bowman|Bowman]], who pretty much surprised me sometime before Volume 5 with an updated version of my recording, which made the piano sound better and added a lot of other instruments to it, really adding a lot of depth and atmosphere to an otherwise-shoddy recording. And then, when Volume 5 came around, it was released as "Ruins (With Strings)", which is what you just heard [[flash:4825|in the update]]!
 
-    <i>Michael Guy Bowman:</i> (composer)
+    I know I've got a better recording of Ruins kicking around here somewhere, I'll have to see if something can be done with it.
+
+    <i>Michael Guy Bowman:</i> (co-composer)
 
-    Really it's the "(With Strings)" part that is my doing. When [[artist:erik-scheele|Jit]] was first inducted to the team, he did not have access at the time to a proper recording environment or midi controller that he could apply a high-quality piano sound to, so he had recorded his piano demo for "Ruins" on what I'm guessing is an on-board laptop microphone. I thought the composition was really great but knew that it would sound too unpolished to make the cut onto a Homestuck album, so I resolved to write a string accompaniment around his composition.
+    Really it's the "(With Strings)" part that is my doing. When [[artist:erik-scheele|Jit]] was first inducted to the team, he did not have access at the time to a proper recording environment or midi controller that he could apply a high-quality piano sound to, so he had recorded his piano demo for [[track:ruins|"Ruins"]] on what I'm guessing is an on-board laptop microphone. I thought the composition was really great but knew that it would sound too unpolished to make the cut onto a Homestuck album, so I resolved to write a string accompaniment around his composition.
 
     By applying an incredibly enormous amount of reverb to the piano part, I hid the low fidelity of the original recording and made it sound as though it was hauntingly played to the listener from the other end of a cave. Given my lack of any truly convincing string samples, I chose instead to use deliberately mechanical strings, gently de-tuning them to sound a bit reminiscent of early string synthesizers, somewhat inspired by ["Crystal Japan"](https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AELO0h04P5k), a creepy instrumental by David Bowie.