« get me outta code hell

hsmusic-data - Data files for https://hsmusic.wiki - track, album, artist & flash info, etc
summary refs log tree commit diff
path: root/album/cosmic-caretakers.txt
diff options
context:
space:
mode:
Diffstat (limited to 'album/cosmic-caretakers.txt')
-rw-r--r--album/cosmic-caretakers.txt60
1 files changed, 32 insertions, 28 deletions
diff --git a/album/cosmic-caretakers.txt b/album/cosmic-caretakers.txt
index f748de64..540ee7e9 100644
--- a/album/cosmic-caretakers.txt
+++ b/album/cosmic-caretakers.txt
@@ -62,20 +62,20 @@ Commentary:
     <i>psithurist:</i>
     The jingles I wrote for this album are a little more involved from the ones you usually find on Homestuck albums, which I did because I thought it would be fun (and it was). A grandiose intro to prepare you for what'll probably be the best god damn album you'll ever hear?
     <i>ackro:</i>
-    this was done pretty quickly, its a simple concept that didnt take much doing. the thing i like most is probably the scratch lightning, ive been drawing a lot of lightning recently.
+    this was done pretty quick, its a simple concept that didnt take much doing. the thing i like most is probably the scratch lightning, ive been drawing a lot of lightning recently.
 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------
 Track: Egbert's Kitchen
 Artist: PotatoBoss
 Track Art: trip
 Duration: 3:01
-References: Under the Hat
+References: track:under-the-hat
 Art Tags: John's dad, Underlings
 URLs:
 - https://unofficialmspafans.bandcamp.com/track/egberts-kitchen
 - https://youtu.be/FQGsW9lDx8E
 Commentary:
     <i>PotatoBoss:</i>
-    For this track i went for the style of music i think Dad listens to, [[track:under-the-hat]] but even jazzier haha. The chiptune breakdown in the middle is also kind of a reference to [[track:showtime-original-mix]] which is the Strife! theme you hear when John encountered Dad. It woked pretty well, i think this is what you'd hear when you walk into the kitchen when Dad is baking something.
+    For this track i went for the style of music i think Dad listens to, [[track:under-the-hat]] but even jazzier haha. The chiptune breakdown in the middle is also kind of a reference to [[track:showtime-original-mix]] which is the Strife! theme you hear when John encountered Dad. It worked pretty well, i think this is what you'd hear when you walk in to the kitchen when Dad is baking something.
     <i>trip:</i>
     I want this dad to be my dad.
 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------
@@ -117,6 +117,7 @@ Artist: Chaosvariant
 Track Art: ackro
 Duration: 2:38
 Art Tags: Dave's bro
+References: Beatdown (Strider Style), Umbral Ultimatum
 URLs:
 - https://unofficialmspafans.bandcamp.com/track/meteor-schmeteor-ill-cut-that-thing-right-in-half
 - https://youtu.be/aYC3XRHFOkQ
@@ -126,7 +127,7 @@ Commentary:
     <i>SplitSuns:</i>
     SplitSuns here. In addition to writing my own song for this project, which you'll find 24 tracks from now, I mastered the album in general. In theory, this means making sure each song is around the same volume so you don't have to keep adjusting your headphones. However, sometimes I did some extra work just to polish things up. Like with this song, for instance: I took what Chaosvariant had finished, added some EQ to make the mix clearer, and added a small sound effect at the end to smooth things out.
     <i>ackro:</i>
-    i really like how i did this one. not too much going on but i feel its good for how simple it is. drawing the meteor took a bit of work, and looking at some reference shots from descend, but it really came together, and of course the sense of scale given with bro and the meteor is very well executed id say. pretty much flawless except for the art which i couldve done better.
+    i really like how i did this one. not too much going on but i feel its good for how simple it is. drawing the meteor took a bit of work, and looking at some reference shots from descend, but it really came together, and of course the sense of scale given with bro and the meteor is very well executed id say. pretty much flawless except for the fire which i couldve done better.
 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------
 Track: Hunting the Most Dangerous Game
 Artist: M3l0m4ni4c
@@ -153,7 +154,7 @@ URLs:
 - https://youtu.be/03hQ5iLuTTQ
 Commentary:
     <b><i>SplitSuns:</i></b>
-    Bec is, first and foremost, a good dog. Let's put aside his featureless visage, god-like powers and key role in creating a Soverign Slayer capable of destroying entire universes. He is a dog that likes to run around, play fetch, and eat treats like any other! This song shows that under-appreciated side of Jade's best friend. How can you say no to those Mario Paint dog barks? (If you think those are great, wait until you listen to the song for Bec's post-Scratch counterpart. Cinematic parallels, I'm telling you.)
+    Bec is, first and foremost, a good dog. Let's put aside his featureless visage, god-like powers and key role in creating a Sovereign Slayer capable of destroying entire universes. He is a dog that likes to run around, play fetch, and eat treats like any other! This song shows that under-appreciated side of Jade's best friend. How can you say no to those Mario Paint dog barks? (If you think those are great, wait until you listen to the song for Bec's post-Scratch counterpart. Cinematic parallels, I'm telling you.)
     <b><i>Ephemerald:</i></b>
     Bec quite clearly doesn't have a care in the world here. You know, it's funny how omnipotent dog brains work. "Yeah, I was brought to this planet with the express purpose of facilitating its ultimate purpose and also ensuring that I exist at all, but, I mean, do I <i>have</i> to do that right now? Can't I just take some time off and go fetch a steak so radioactive it would make the Elephant's Foot seem like a regular old chunk of steel by comparison? The answer is yes, I can. So I will." Good dog. Best friend. Not a superb prioritizer.
 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------
@@ -182,10 +183,10 @@ URLs:
 - https://youtu.be/pCKkP1NDG7s
 Commentary:
     <i>Grace Medley:</i>
-    Sorry, sorry to interrupt the booklet, folks, but I've got a cracking idea: see the next time you find yourself in a pub toilet, and you've got a pen on you, write on the door, "Johnny Crocker, R.I.P." Or let's say you're not old enough to get into pubs yet, let's say, you're still in school? Write it on a desk. Scratch it in with a compass. "Johnny Crocker, R.I.P." Or let's say you're online. Let's say your'ee on Bebo, Facebook, Myspace, Twitter, a forum, whatever it is, just get the message out there. "Johnny Crocker, R.I.P." Miss you, big man. Gone, but not forgotten.
+    Sorry, sorry to interrupt the booklet, folks, but I've got a cracking idea: see the next time you find yourself in a pub toilet, and you've got a pen on you, write on the door, "Johnny Crocker, R.I.P." Or let's say you're not old enough to get into pubs yet, let's say, you're still in school? Write it on a desk. Scratch it in with a compass. "Johnny Crocker, R.I.P." Or let's say you're online. Let's say you're on Bebo, Facebook, Myspace, Twitter, a forum, whatever it is, just get the message out there. "Johnny Crocker, R.I.P." Miss you, big man. Gone, but not forgotten.
     And who is Johnny Crocker...? Eh, who cares.
     <i>nights:</i>
-    I had the sketch of this track art sitting by for a while, since I never found the time to finish it - not even during the holiday break. I finally was able to find the time to do exactly that on... A very long and boring plane trip, hahah. While drawing it, I thought about hwo Jane never really knew her poppop, nor did she know she was the cause of his death in the first place (classic Homestuck), so I wanted to convey that bittersweet feeling through the piece. I experimented on the colors with using a couple paper-constructioney textures on it and on the backdrop. Also, the stewardess on my plane trip caught a glance of the drawing and gave me a compliment in broken English, so you know this is some certified REAL good art.
+    I had the sketch of this track art sitting by for a while, since I never found the time to finish it - not even during the holiday break. I finally was able to find the time to do exactly that on... A very long and boring plane trip, hahah. While drawing it, I thought about how Jane never really knew her poppop, nor did she know she was the cause of his death in the first place (classic Homestuck), so I wanted to convey that bittersweet feeling through the piece. I experimented on the colors with using a couple paper-constructioney textures on it and on the backdrop. Also, the stewardess on my plane trip caught a glance of the drawing and gave me a compliment in broken English, so you know this is some certified REAL good art.
 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------
 Track: The Light's Rebellion
 Artist: Circlejourney
@@ -205,7 +206,7 @@ Commentary:
     Greatly inspired by the soundtracks of Touhou, PMMM, and various Japanese media, The Light's Rebellion is meant to sound like the overture of an epic and tumultous tale. To me, the life of Roxy's illustrious and erudite Mom - encompassing the publication of doorstepper novels, a Guy Fieri rodeo down a waterfall of blood, and death as a revolutionary at the hands of an alien empress - is the sort of capricious novel-worthy story that can only be told through battling melodies in the major pentatonic scale, 3/4 + 6/8 cross-rhythms, and soaring trumpets.
     The primary melodic motif opens the piece on the solo violin - a rousing tune representing the character of Alpha Rose and her rebellious aspirations. The trumpet then introduces the secondary motif - that of The Thirteenth Hour, a melodic backbone representing (erroneously?*) the novels to which she devoted the greater part of her life. It rises and dips, shifting between lyrical solos, brassy full-orchestra segments, and percussive interludes. Two of Rose's motifs, Aggrieve and Endless Climb, are also briefly quoted.
     In all, creating The Light's Rebellion was a joy and a challenge, and possibly the first and last track of its style that I'll ever do.
-    *The video from which I'd heard The Thirteenth Hour featured the cover of Compacency of the Learned, leading me to associate the track with Calmasis and CotL. In retrospect it was probably more about Calliope's Calmasis-like trollsona (i.e. the thirteenth "troll") than Calmasis, but here we are. (Calliope is named for the muse of epics, Mom wrote epics, it works...)
+    *The video from which I'd heard The Thirteenth Hour featured the cover of Complacency of the Learned, leading me to associate the track with Calmasis and CotL. In retrospect it was probably more about Calliope's Calmasis-like trollsona (i.e. the thirteenth "troll") than Calmasis, but here we are. (Calliope is named for the muse of epics, Mom wrote epics, it works...)
     <b><i>ndividedbyzero:</i></b>
     Her hair is like the sun, rebelling against the oppressive shadow of the night sky.
     Not complacent, but sure as hell learned enough to punt you down a waterfall with stabby needles.
@@ -233,10 +234,10 @@ URLs:
 - https://youtu.be/cXXGaaHE7W8
 Commentary:
     <i>ndividedbyzero:</i>
-    wilson for wisdom. stiller for power. glover for courage. with the tepartite decree of america's three greatest heralds, backed by a rendition of beatdown so terrifying it can only be described as psychological warfare, the stage has b een set for the star of the show. the experience behind the experience. but such titles do not ascribe what importance this fiend deserves. nay, they COULD not ascribe the requisite importance, for only one title suits the hero, the madman, the director and architect to a hall of fame of utter shit.
+    wilson for wisdom. stiller for power. glover for courage. with the tripartite decree of america's three greatest heralds, backed by a rendition of beatdown so terrifying it can only be described as psychological warfare, the stage has been set for the star of the show. the experience behind the experience. but such titles do not ascribe what importance this fiend deserves. nay, they COULD not ascribe the requisite importance, for only one title suits the hero, the madman, the director and architect to a hall of fame of utter shit.
     he is THE BIG MAN, and we are all in his court.
     heads are about to roll.
-    MISC NOTES: this piece started with me thinking "hm, i really want to use running hell in this dave song" and then the rest kind of flowed from there. in that segment, you may note that violent j seems to alternate between lamenting the presence of "TIE WITCH" and singing her praises. i feel as though if an alien queen actualyl appeared to install the insane clown posse as figureheads of a government responsible for the deaths of billions, it would have to involve some sort of mental manipulation on her part, because honestly, icp seem like sort of decent upstanding folks in reality? like violent j wholeheartedly supports his daughter being a furry so he seems to be a nice dad at least. shit, in this political climate they might not be half bad as dual presidents, comparatively, and they're literal clowns. thanks to grace for recommending i use icp's seminal and apparent manifesto, "What Is A Juggalo", whose lyrics you should look up because they are just truly incredible. the section it transitions to, where the nightcore becomes ambient noise, is meant to symbolize the terse standoff between dave and icp before he cuts their heads off, but also it was mostly tongue in cheek. waters of nazareth also plays during that section very faintly, which partly symbolizes that in parallel to this event rose is executing the antichrist over a waterfall, but that was something i just made up now. more intentionally, sampling waters of nazareth badly in a strider song contrasts with the fantastic use of the sample in splitsuns' [[track:thyme-on-my-fries]]. (love ya split.) oh god this was a wall of text. i'm done now bye
+    MISC NOTES: this piece started with me thinking "hm, i really want to use running hell in this dave song" and then the rest kind of flowed from there. in that segment, you may note that violent j seems to alternate between lamenting the presence of "THE WITCH" and singing her praises. i feel as though if an alien queen actually appeared to install the insane clown posse as figureheads of a government responsible for the deaths of billions, it would have to involve some sort of mental manipulation on her part, because honestly, icp seem like sort of decent upstanding folks in reality? like violent j wholeheartedly supports his daughter being a furry so he seems to be a nice dad at least. shit, in this political climate they might not be half bad as dual presidents, comparatively, and they're literal clowns. thanks to grace for recommending i use icp's seminal and apparent manifesto, "What Is A Juggalo", whose lyrics you should look up because they are just truly incredible. the section it transitions to, where the nightcore becomes ambient noise, is meant to symbolize the tense standoff between dave and icp before he cuts their heads off, but also it was mostly tongue in cheek. waters of nazareth also plays during that section very faintly, which partly symbolizes that in parallel to this event rose is executing the antichrist over a waterfall, but that was something i just made up now. more intentionally, sampling waters of nazareth badly in a strider song contrasts with the fantastic use of the sample in splitsuns' [[track:thyme-on-my-fries]]. (love ya split). oh god this was a wall of text. i'm done now bye
     <i>dazed-squid:</i>
     I kinda wanted to show Alpha Dave as a simple sturdy figure in a messy messy background because that's how Dirk saw him? Super cool and collected in all the chaos surrounding him. Also suits.
 Lyrics:
@@ -249,7 +250,7 @@ Lyrics:
     Get this, the witch has made my chest its permanent nightly visiting nest<br>The witch told me about blood that rains, out of the neck and what particular veins and I-
     Dream about cutting off heads with a shovel, the dreams are getting serious, I think I'm in trouble
     About murder, witnessin' death setting in, and it ain't no heaven that's letting me in!
-    What is a juggalo? He drinks like a fish and then he starts hugging people like a drunken (WAOW) next thing he's pickin 'fights with his best friends, then he starts with the hugging again (unintelligible)
+    What is a juggalo? He drinks like a fish and then he starts hugging people like a drunken (WAOW) next thing he's pickin' fights with his best friends, then he starts with the hugging again (unintelligible)
     IT'S THE SWEET BRO AND HELLA JEFF SHOW! WHOAAAAAAAAa
 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------
 Track: Jade English - Study for Eclectic Bass, 1984.1
@@ -272,8 +273,8 @@ URLs:
 - https://youtu.be/CN2oWjAy6EI
 Commentary:
     <i>Interrobang:</i>
-    This piece has been in the works for a LONG time. I started it in March of 2017 and though most of the compositional work was completed by July of that year, I didn't finish polishing everything up until late April 2018, after many months of procrastination and tweaking. The idea of the track is simple, it's Jake's Grandmother, Jade English, writing a song for her signature eclectic bass sometime in the 80's, which you probably already knew from the title. Anyway, I wanted to make a song that you could supposedly 'play' on the eclectic bass, which meant I had to figure out what exactly the components of such an instrument were (see [[media:misc/eclectic-bass-diagram.png|the accompanying diagram]]). I chose the iconic Yamaha DX7 (used in tons of 80's pop) to be the keyboards of the instrument as it could make the sounds I wanted, and I had an emulation (Digital Suburban's "Dexed") on hand. Other instruments used in the song were Karfoyer Audio's "Pastabass" and "Swagbass" for the bass guitars themselves, as well as Full Bucket Music's "Ragnarók" (used to flesh out some bass frequencies at the song's peak), and some built-in GarageBand instruments (drums) and effects.
-    Compositionally, I started out with the ostinato that closes [[track:rhapsody-in-green]] (Clark Powell) from the Felt album, but played in reverse, adding in an FM pad (the aforementioned DX7) and [[track:skaianet]] by Mark Hadley on the other bass guitar. The introduction section transitions into variations on [[track:verdancy-bassline]] by Kalibration, and closes the track's first half with a medley of various Jade-related songs. The second half is an original thing (though the beginning is a variation on [[track:afraid-of-the-darko]] by RJ! Lake) that I had build in complexity and intensity before dropping off to end the piece. Reference-wise, I tried to keep things centered roughly on Jade, as well as some other skaianet/felt sort of stuff that I thought fit the Alpha world and Jae's place in it, but I did end up throwing in a couple memetic references, see if you can find them both!
+    This piece has been in the works for a LONG time. I started it in March of 2017, and though most of the compositional work was complete by July of that year, I didn't finish polishing everything up until late April 2018, after many months of procrastination and tweaking. The idea of the track is simple, it's Jake's Grandmother, Jade English, writing a song for her signature eclectic bass sometime in the 80's, which you probably already knew from the title. Anyway, I wanted to make a song that you could supposedly 'play' on the eclectic bass, which meant I had to figure out what exactly the components of such an instrument were (see [[media:misc/eclectic-bass-diagram.png|the accompanying diagram]]). I chose the iconic Yamaha DX7 (used in tons of 80's pop) to be the keyboards of the instrument as it could make the sounds I wanted, it was from around the right time, and I had an emulation (Digital Suburban's "Dexed") on hand. Other instruments used in the song were Karfoyer Audio's "Pastabass" and "Swagbass" for the bass guitars themselves, as well as Full Bucket Music's "Ragnarök" (used to flesh out some bass frequencies at the song's peak), and some built-in GarageBand instruments (drums) and effects.
+    Compositionally, I started out with the ostinato that closes [[track:rhapsody-in-green]] (Clark Powell) from the Felt album, but played in reverse, adding in an FM pad (the aforementioned DX7) and [[track:skaianet]] by Mark Hadley on the other bass guitar. The introduction section transitions into variations on [[track:verdancy-bassline]] by Kalibration, and closes the track's first half with a medley of various Jade-related songs. The second half is an original thing (though the beginning is a variation on [[track:afraid-of-the-darko]] by RJ! Lake) that I had build in complexity and intensity before dropping off to end the piece. Reference-wise, I tried to keep things centered roughly on Jade, as well as some other skaianet/felt sort of stuff that I thought fit the Alpha world and Jade's place in it, but I did end up throwing in a couple memetic references, see if you can find them both!
     <i>Jas:</i>
     Grandma Harley often wrote her grandson about the tyranny of Lord English, obviously not able to hide everything from the enemy.
 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------
@@ -289,12 +290,13 @@ Commentary:
     <i>WHATISLOSTINTHEMINES:</i>
     This song took remarkably long to put together. Less because it was difficult, and more because I kept getting distracted with other projects along the way. Anyway, meow.
     <b><i>SplitSuns:</i></b>
-    shu delivers some impressively smooth and refined art for everyone's second-favorite cat whose name begins with a G, GCAT. They say you can tell a lot about someone from their eyes, which makes it more impressive that you can glean this cat's mischievous expression without any eyes at all. GCAT is prepared for action from its carefully positioned placement on a tree branch, ready to pounce at a ball of yarn or teleport to the spot best suited for making your life hell. Some rough glitchy effects in the background add an interesting dimension to the piece, nicely contrasting against its smooth linework. This is one art you won't want to miss, and knowing GCAT's temper, you might miss it if you blink.
+    Shu delivers some impressively smooth and refined art for everyone's second-favorite cat whose name begins with a G, GCAT. They say you can tell a lot about someone from their eyes, which makes it more impressive that you can glean this cat's mischievous expression without any eyes at all. GCAT is prepared for action from its carefully positioned placement on a tree branch, ready to pounce at a ball of yarn or teleport to the spot best suited for making your life hell. Some rough glitchy effects in the background add an interesting dimension to the piece, nicely contrasting against its smooth linework. This is one art you won't want to miss, and knowing GCAT's temper, you might miss it if you blink.
 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------
 Track: Sweet Talker
 Artist: Ucklin
 Track Art: nights
 Duration: 3:24
+References: Hate You
 Art Tags: The Condesce
 URLs:
 - https://unofficialmspafans.bandcamp.com/track/sweet-talker
@@ -302,7 +304,7 @@ URLs:
 Commentary:
     <i>Ucklin:</i>
     The idea for this song started with the transition around 2:35 to the section with [[track:hate-you]] played in a straight rhythm. I wanted to capture a feeling of dread by making that part of the song methodical and delaying the payoff of some of the notes by a beat. It would also be a stark contrast to have this straight section in solo piano right after a climactic section with plenty of instruments in a swing beat! I was inspired to incorporate a musical palette from the 30s-40s because that's when I estimate Condy took over as Betty Crocker and started doing her guardian things. In the original song, I planned for the bass to carry most of the weight with regards to rhythm, but eventually, I was persuaded to add percussion to the track after helpful feedback from a few of the organizers, and I think it helped a lot! Hate You is quoted 3 times, although the first two ended up a bit disguised by subsequent layers of instrumentation.
-    With regards to the rest of the composition, I tried to have fun! In a way this song is supposed to tell the story of The Baroness. The beginning hook and the next section portray the mask she wears as Betty Crocker upon arriving to earth, and the persona that caused her husband Colonel Sassacre to fall in love with her. That part of the story is pretty funny to me. The following section introduces the mystery of her real identity with a jazzy Hate You quote before returning to the first section, and finally the climactic transition of the song represents the death of Colonel Sassacre and the beginning of Crocker's reign of terror proper. Finally, at the very end of the song, there is a piccolo harmony which just sounds like aliens to me, possibly because it sounds a little like a theremin. I learned a lot composing this song! Thanks for listening, and I hope you enjoyed! (And thanks to nights for art more polished and gorgeous than I could hope to deserve!)
+    With regards to the rest of the composition, I tried to have fun! In a way, this song is supposed to tell the story of The Baroness. The beginning hook and the next section portray the mask she wears as Betty Crocker upon arriving to earth, and the persona that caused her husband Colonel Sassacre to fall in love with her. That part of the story is pretty funny to me. The following section introduces the mystery of her real identity with a jazzy Hate You quote before returning to the first section, and finally the climactic transition of the song represents the death of Colonel Sassacre and the beginning of Crocker's reign of terror proper. Finally, at the very end of the song, there is a piccolo harmony which just sounds like aliens to me, possibly because it sounds a little like a theremin. I learned a lot composing this song! Thanks for listening, and I hope you enjoyed! (And thanks to nights for art more polished and gorgeous than I could hope to deserve!)
     <i>nights:</i>
     This very nice track gave me vibes of a casual setting with the condesce, so I thought to draw her doing a mundane but fun task - baking! I've always liked fanart of HIC as betty crocker, doing crockery things like baking cake and raising post-scratch john/jade.
 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------
@@ -336,12 +338,12 @@ URLs:
 - https://youtu.be/aw72N9h0P08
 Commentary:
     <i>Mathias Ramalho:</i>
-    H*ck dude ye made this shit for a thingy that was DEAD in its FIRST AND ONLY APPEARANCE IN THE ENTIRE FUCKING COMIC??
+    H*ck dude ye made this shit for a thingy that was DEAD in it's FIRST AND ONLY APPEARANCE IN THE ENTIRE FUCKING COMIC??
     So! I've realized nobody wanted to make a track for this completely relevant character for completely obvious reasons, so I took three days of my entire life to give this beautiful creature the piece it deserves. The whole process of making this was to base it around a small snippet of Famitracker that Cookie made a long time ago, and with that I completely broke it up to a point of being in love with it, so thank you Cookie you gave me an awesome idea as well as a good snippet!
     <i>cookiefonster:</i>
     I had the idea of remixing [[track:aradias-theme-pre-death]] from the Homestuck Sound Test for this song and tried to make a track for it but never ended up finishing it. To my surprise, Coy decided that he was going to finish this garbage song. After I posted the project file, he proceeded to work his magic on it, making it actually good in the process, and now it's pretty much his track and he deserves any and all praise for it.
     <b><i>Grace Medley:</i></b>
-    he wasnt going to let this song just :Die~2:
+    he wasnt going to let the song just :Die~2:
     <i>freckledOctopus:</i>
     I love the track and wanted to try and capture the more haunting side to it.
 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------
@@ -372,7 +374,7 @@ URLs:
 - https://youtu.be/Rd9a2KQ_ZVk
 Commentary:
     <i>Ducky Senpai:</i>
-    For those who may be curious, the title (suggested by Lambda) is a play on the term "Polyphemus" which refers to the cyclops in The Odyssey. It's a really dumb pun, and I love it.
+    For those who may be curious, the title (suggested by Lambda) is play on the term "Polyphemus" which refers to the cyclops in The Odyssey. It's a really dumb pun, and I love it.
     <b><i>SplitSuns:</i></b>
     Polypolyphemus is an intense track, so it's fitting for its art to capture the same intensity. Sollux's Biclops is captured right before its imminent demise as the troll's Mind Honey-induced flip out rips through the ceiling of his hive and surrounds the lusus in a multi-colored beam of energy. The meteors illuminating the night sky further illustrate the carnage present in the scene in a fashion that pops up time and time again in Homestuck proper. If only one of those meteors could break the chain around the Biclops' leg and set it free! Wait, the resulting impact would probably just kill the Biclops anyway. Never mind, that was a stupid idea.
 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------
@@ -387,7 +389,7 @@ URLs:
 - https://youtu.be/qayMFPJjtI0
 Commentary:
     <i>WHATISLOSTINTHEMINES:</i>
-    Crabs taste pretty good, gotta say. I'm partial to snow crab, myself. Of course, the only place I ever had them was Red Lobster: the apex of all seefood cuisine.
+    Crabs taste pretty good, gotta say. I'm partial to snow crab, myself. Of course, the only place I ever had them was Red Lobster: the apex of all seafood cuisine.
     <i>ackro:</i>
     this one is pretty much just a carbon copy of a homestuck panel i found. i mean i didnt trace anything, but its all placed pretty much the same with minor differences. dont give me too much praise for this one.
 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------
@@ -437,11 +439,11 @@ URLs:
 Commentary:
     <i>Circlejourney:</i>
     I conceptualised Amniotic Daydream together with Skip: the first thing we decided was that it should be a lullaby-like track built on top of a heartbeat. I ultimately ended up working on this track alone, looking to a demo Skip made as a stylistic reference before taking it in my own direction.
-    Incubating within her egg for almost her entire lifetime, Dragonmom's track describes this inchoate state: the warmth and serenity and loneliness of waiting to hatch, and the constancy of the heartbeat throughout. The gradual build and elaboration of the track mirrors the development of an embryo. Pad synths ebb and flow, swelling and lulling with the beating of the heart. The drums start out muffled, as if heard through shell and chorion, and the sound only begins to take shape towarsd the middle of the track as the riffs grow more complex.
+    Incubating within her egg for almost her entire lifetime, Dragonmom's track describes this inchoate state: the warmth and serenity and loneliness of waiting to hatch, and the constancy of the heartbeat throughout. The gradual build and elaboration of the track mirrors the development of an embryo. Pad synths ebb and flow, swelling and lulling with the beating of the heart. The drums start out muffled, as if heard through shell and chorion, and the sound only begins to take shape towards the middle of the track as the riffs grow more complex.
     Featured in Amniotic Daydream is a delicate rendition of the motif from the Redglare/Pyralspite-related track JUST1C3 R41NS FROM 4BOV3 (also by me and Skip). This version pares away the ferocity of the original and turns it into a sweet lullaby tune. Terezi's lusus, meant to become a fearsome dragon like Pyralspite, may only dream of that destiny for now - and forever.
     I'd love to thank the mods for their feedback, which truly helped me turn this track into what it is now.
     <i>ackro:</i>
-    this piece is probably the most complex one i did for the album, and i think it paid off in spades. i used a lot of elements from the scene in which terezi's dragon hatches and is immediately killed by a falling meteor, which might be one of the best looking parts in homestuck, although its hard to choose since the first half of homestuck is littered with striking imagery. oh my god just look at it. so fucking good guys. its really good.
+    this piece is probably the most complex one i did for the album, and i think it payed off in spades. i used a lot of elements from the scene in which terezi's dragon hatches and is immediately killed by a falling meteor, which might be one of the best looking parts in homestuck, although its hard to choose since the first half of homestuck is littered with striking imagery. oh my god just look at it. so good. so fucking good guys. its really good.
 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------
 Track: Arachnida Antecessor
 Artist: arcaneGemini
@@ -460,6 +462,8 @@ Commentary:
     What I made instead was the track laid before you.
     I'd like to think that it's pretty snazzy and very Serket, though I have a sneaking suspicion that I may come back to this track l8er and fix it up when I actually have a clue what I'm doing. Yes, it's pretty short and it's kinda flawed in its execution, but I just hope that you can appreciate this humble nerd's first attempt at a somewhat-professional-level tune.
     You know what? Since you've gone through all the trouble to read this here commentary, have a free concept guitar riff for this tune. <a href="https://soundcloud.com/arcanegemini/spidermum-initial-riff/s-WaNoN">For you it's on the house.</a>
+    <i>Caitlyn Beamer:</i>
+    I understand why hussie didn't draw spider-mom with hair on her. that took way too much time to have to do it more than once.
 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------
 Track: STRONG Butler. Best Dad.
 Directory: STRONG-butler-best-dad
@@ -477,12 +481,12 @@ Commentary:
     Honestly I'm not entirely sure how this worked out, but I'm glad it did since horses are the bees knees.
     I said before in Arachnida Antecessor that it was my first song for this group, and technically it is (I think), but this is the one that I feel most greatly reflects my progression in skill as a musician.
     This tune went from a slow Horschestra with awful, grotesque choir & drum samples to this lovely little equine ditty as I went from a newbie musician creating mediocre covers of songs' melodies to the only-slightly-less newbie musician writing this very commentary piece.
-    As such, this song will always fill a special horse-shaped hole in my heart.
+    As such, this song will always fill a special horse-shaped space in my heart.
     What's this? You don't want all this personal heartfelt guff? You want me to actually talk about the track? Oh alright.
-    Aurthor is, unequivocally, the best character in all of Homestuck. There is no possible way you can disprove this. It was pretty much high blasphemy that so few songs were made to honour him, and so I produced this offer to appease the gods and bring balance to the universe. You're welcome.
+    Aurthour is, unequivocally, the best character in all of Homestuck. There is no possible way you can disprove this. It was pretty much high blasphemy that so few songs were made to honour him, and so I produced this offer to appease the gods and bring balance to the universe. You're welcome.
     Also yes, that is me saying 'neigh'.
     <i>tipsy:</i>
-    For every album cover I've drawn so far, I try to make them look a little different and experiment with different styles. In this case I tried to draw a HORSE (crazy i know) and used this very painting-like flat style, and decided to put Equius's signature up, effectively making it his own painting! This went through lots of colour hue alterations and was originally a very light pink desert in a sunny sky before we settled on this darker background to make Aurthor stand out more. I like to think that Equius is simultaneously admiring his suroundings and panicking about their imminent death by sunburn.
+    For every album cover I've drawn so far, I try to make them look a little different and experiment with different styles. In this case I tried to draw a HORSE (crazy i know) and used this very painting-like flat style, and decided to put Equius's signature up, effectively making it his own painting! This went through lots of colour hue alterations and was originally a very light pink desert in a sunny sky before we settled on this darker background to make Aurthour stand out more. I like to think that Equius is simultaneously admiring his surroundings and panicking about their imminent death by sunburn.
 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------
 Track: Absent Reflection
 Artist: PoisonedElite
@@ -495,7 +499,7 @@ URLs:
 - https://youtu.be/uw2z3juY-64
 Commentary:
     <i>PoisonedElite:</i>
-    Wow, this is the first song I ever signed up to make, over a year ago in April of 2017. From the beginning writing a song about Gamzee's Lusus provided a challenge due to the fact that it only appears in a panel or two, so I decided to write this song around the lack of it in Gamzee's life. Like Calming Quartz, this also had a different song as the rough Draft, so <a href="https://soundcloud.com/poisonedelite/goat-dad-wip/s-8cX5C">here ya go</a>.
+    Wow, this is the first song I ever signed up to make, over a year ago in April of 2017. From the beginning writing a song about Gamzee's Lusus provided a challenge due to the fact that it only appears in a panel or two, so I decided to write the song around the lack of it in Gamzee's life. Like Calming Quartz, this also had a different song as the rough Draft, so <a href="https://soundcloud.com/poisonedelite/goat-dad-wip/s-8cX5C">here ya go</a>.
     Play Hollow Knight, eat your dinner, and never forget the pokemon you lose when you're doing a Nuzlocke challenge. Rest in Peace Oswin ;-;7
     <i>Jas:</i>
     Sometimes you wait a long time to see the people you love.
@@ -520,7 +524,7 @@ Artist: M3l0m4ni4c
 Track Art: Circlejourney
 Duration: 4:24
 References:
-- Typheus
+- Fear of the Heavens
 - Silencio
 - The Vast Glub
 - Penumbra Phantasm
@@ -534,7 +538,7 @@ Commentary:
     *angry tentacle noises*
     <i>Circlejourney:</i>
     Listening to Whispering Leviathan always made me feel like I was hearing it in a submarine environment - perfectly appropriate to the subject of Gl'bgolyb. The scene in which Gl'bgolyb was revealed was, to me, one of the several "holy shit" moments of Homestuck, and instead of trying to depict the vastness of Feferi's lusus, I went for a sense of mystery and foreboding more closely matching the tone of the music, by revealing nothing but its tentacles in silhouette.
-    Finding the right balance between silhouette and rendering proved one of the primary challenges of completing this piece. Too much light meant the image lost its spooky, foreboding tone; too little made it look flat. In the end I came out with something that roughly strikes that balance, though I still feel it loses some of the spookiness of the sketch. Thanks @ the good people at the Homestuck Artist discord for the tips!
+    Finding the right balance between silhouette and rendering proved one of the primary challenges of completing this piece. Too much light meant the image lost its spooky, foreboding tone; too little made it look flat. In the end I came out with something that roughly strikes that balance, though I still feel that it loses some of the spookiness of the sketch. Thanks @ the good people at the Homestuck Artist discord for the tips!
 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------
 Track: Al-Aalam
 Artist: Kal-la-kal-la
@@ -618,7 +622,7 @@ URLs:
 - https://youtu.be/Gfb17_RW2M0
 Commentary:
     <i>ndividedbyzero:</i>
-    This track originates from an idea I had in 2014 to make a track about Calliope and Caliborn's parents. Five years later, it's finally done, stitched together from the composition and/or actual studio clips of like 4 FLPs (I went through about 6, in all). Funnily enough, the scribbles I had for this song in 2014 then are completely different composition-wise from what ended up being made, but the narrative loosely remains in this track: the cherubs' mother drifts through space, searching for her mate. She spots him, taking off at full speed, following him as he leaves a trail of destruction across the universe. Their eventual meeting is tense, cold. Saying nothing, they transform into unfathomable astral serpents, and battle to create the most innocent muse and most shitheaded gremlin to ever exist.
+    This track originates from an idea I had in 2014 to make a track about Calliope and Caliborn's parents. Five years later, it's finally done, stitched together from the composition and/or actual audio clips of like 4 FLPs (I went through about 6, all in all). Funnily enough, the scribbles I had for this song in 2014 then are completely different composition-wise from what ended up being made, but the narrative loosely remains in this track: the cherubs' mother drifts through space, searching for her mate. She spots him, taking off at full speed, following him as he leaves a trail of destruction across the universe. Their eventual meeting is tense, cold. Saying nothing, they transform into unfathomable astral serpents, and battle to create the most innocent muse and most shitheaded gremlin to ever exist.
     I attribute the latter half of this track to listening to a lot of Hawaii: Part II, which is also sampled at the end. Listen to Hawaii: Part II.
     <b><i>Ephemerald:</i></b>
     The game of choice for cherubs seems to be chess, or at least, some neon-green candy-red shitty-twist variant of the game, but I'm getting real playing card motifs here. Two identical, serpentine warriors, millions and millions of miles long, locked in a symmetrical whirlwind of a strife. Reminds me of the art to [[track:noirscape]] back on Volume 9, though that's a more literal example. The spiraling, iconic egg in the middle, shining like a light in the darkness, is a very clear reminder of what these two are fighting for: the right to force their opponent to give birth to literally the worst entity in all of existence. But I suppose it didn't matter who won or who lost. After all, he was already there.