too many things...

- dapper dueling commentary citation
- embittered shore tumblr commentary

3 files changed, 36 insertions, 8 deletions

diff --git a/album/coloUrs-and-mayhem-universe-a.yaml b/album/coloUrs-and-mayhem-universe-a.yaml
index a7712d2b..67738f6a 100644
--- a/album/coloUrs-and-mayhem-universe-a.yaml
+++ b/album/coloUrs-and-mayhem-universe-a.yaml
@@ -404,21 +404,23 @@ MIDI Project Files:
 Commentary: |-
     <i>Max Wright:</i> ([Tumblr](https://imbrog.tumblr.com/post/26895006459/cobalt-corsair-commentary), 7/10/2012)
 
+    <u><b>Cobalt Corsair</b></u>
+
     For those of you who didn't know, Cobalt Corsair was originally a theme for Hussie. The song being given to Mindfang, while some find it hilariously ironic, I find to be a lot more fitting. I do have a tendency to write piratey sounding orchestral songs; this time it just happened to be accidental! For this commentary, I'm going to be dividing the song up both by sections and instrument groups.
 
-    <b>SECTION I - REGAL</b>
+    <u><b>SECTION I - REGAL</b></u>
 
     I always wanted the piece to sound dominating and over-important, at least for this part. It begins with a solo flugelhorn playing its melody, providing an entrance for the rest of the orchestral. After not too long, the trumpets blasting out their fanfare in perfect 4th intervals, the lower brass backing them up with a strong chordal harmony - the brass works to create a very regal sound. Though Hussie as a character isn't anywhere near this serious, I felt that it wouldn't hurt to portray him in such a way - the way his character sees himself. The whole thing reeks of overlording and power, which, as it turns out, seems to fit the pirate idea nicely.
 
-    <b>SECTION II - BROODING</b>
+    <u><b>SECTION II - BROODING</b></u>
 
     This is where the piece changes from 12/8 to 4/4, and the solo flugelhorn returns to introduce the new section. I imagined this to be the other side of Hussie, calculating, always working, creating his world. The whole section is just a build up of instruments, as the lower string ostinato loops itself over. There isn't really much to say about this section, but it certainly works as a contrast for the rest of the piece.
 
-    <b>SECTION III - EXECUTION</b>
+    <u><b>SECTION III - EXECUTION</b></u>
 
     This is the final minute of the piece, just after the moment of silence. It explodes into a wall of sound, seeking to bring back the power of the first section in a more open way. I actually wrote part of this section before working on the rest of the piece, so naturally, it's what set the general tone. My favourite melody is introduced in this section (played most obviously by the flutes), and I regret not being able to flesh the idea out more. The piccolo part rising above the rest is interesting - it fits perfectly in with the whole pirate theme, despite me never considering this to be a pirate song. I suppose I consider this section the execution of various plans, to a successful conclusion.
 
-    <b>INSTRUMENT GROUPS</b>
+    <u><b>INSTRUMENT GROUPS</b></u>
 
     Now, as you can probably tell from listening, Cobalt Corsair is very dense texturally. To give you a visual idea, here's a post from a little while ago showing the layout of the sequencer. [It's big.](https://imbrog.tumblr.com/post/23713453688/did-i-ever-mention-just-how-long-cobalt-corsair)
 
diff --git a/album/coloUrs-and-mayhem-universe-b.yaml b/album/coloUrs-and-mayhem-universe-b.yaml
index 24e79ae3..1d84007d 100644
--- a/album/coloUrs-and-mayhem-universe-b.yaml
+++ b/album/coloUrs-and-mayhem-universe-b.yaml
@@ -856,10 +856,18 @@ Cover Artists:
 - Soju
 Art Tags:
 - Jake
+Sheet Music Files:
+- Title: Rough sheet music
+  Description: >-
+    Shared by the composer on Tumblr, alongside a crappy piano recording.
+  Files:
+  - 'Dapper Duelling Piano Rough - Max Wright.pdf'
 Commentary: |-
-    <i>Max Wright:</i> (composer, via [early commentary collection](https://hsmusic.wiki/media/misc/commentary-collection.txt))
+    <i>Max Wright:</i> (composer, ([Tumblr](https://imbrog.tumblr.com/post/21076871581/dapper-dueling-context), 4/14/2012)
+
+    >So, I was a HUGE fan of Dapper Dueling when you first put up the original version, but I LOVE what you did with it for the Homestuck music contest. I can't wait to see what you came up with next, because holy crap you are talented. What inspired you with this one, since it's telling me to ask you something? It has a very Firefly, Joss Whedon sort of feel to it, which I personally really like about it.
 
-    Dapper Dueling was inspired originally by a Steampunk band named The Cog is Dead - after listening to the song I just linked, I tried to take down the general feel and basic instrumentation, and then work on my own from there. Instruments used in the piece are:
+    Dapper Dueling was inspired originally by a Steampunk band named [The Cog is Dead](https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3tWnRrm_Xpw) - after listening to the song I just linked, I tried to take down the general feel and basic instrumentation, and then work on my own from there. Instruments used in the piece are:
 
     - Acoustic Guitars
     - Accordion
@@ -871,7 +879,7 @@ Commentary: |-
     - Maracas, castanets, very very faint snare (you can hear it at 0:10, under the whistle), constant bass drum beat
     - bang bang wink
 
-    I also gave the original Showtime strife mix a few listens for the purpose of structuring my piece - after all, it's meant to be a Strife theme. However, pretty much all sources of inspiration were only used in the parts before the banjo solo; the rest was just me having fun with music.
+    I also gave the [[Showtime (Original Mix)|original Showtime strife mix]] a few listens for the purpose of structuring my piece - after all, it's meant to be a Strife theme. However, pretty much all sources of inspiration were only used in the parts before the banjo solo; the rest was just me having fun with music.
 
     Let me also point out that it made me extremely happy to see in canon that Jake bounces from side to side before he is about to fight; it was the exact image of him I was hoping for.
 
diff --git a/album/lofam2.yaml b/album/lofam2.yaml
index 98d30d55..0a41edcd 100644
--- a/album/lofam2.yaml
+++ b/album/lofam2.yaml
@@ -1849,7 +1849,7 @@ Commentary: |-
     the song is really supposed to be a reflection of the four kids and their relation to each other. that's right, no trolls allowed :U
 
     anyway, i hope you enjoy it all!
-    
+
     <u>[here's a download link](https://soundcloud.com/samm-neiland/the-four-thrones)</u>
 
     <i>composition, arrangement, and performance by me, samm neiland.</i>
@@ -2035,11 +2035,29 @@ Commentary: |-
 
     I've always liked the idea behind [[album:mobius-trip-and-hadron-kaleido]], and the mysterious character canvas that the album brought across. So, from there, I wanted to contribute my own ideas of how MTaHK were represented, and ended up with Embittered Shore. I wanted the piece to have that [[artist:michael-guy-bowman|'Bowman']] quality to it, while still refraining from outright copying his ideas off in any particular way - the heavy use of guitars and fleeting synths was my way of capturing the emotion that Bowman injects into his music, to bring across his characterisation. Ultimately, the piece ends the way it started - it is a brief window through which the troubled characters may be projected and represented.
 
+    <i>Max Wright:</i> (composer, [Tumblr](https://imbrog.tumblr.com/post/17542231858/homestuck-music-contest-entry-2-embittered), 2/13/2012)
+
+    <b>Homestuck Music Contest Entry #2 - Embittered Shore</b> <i>(MT&HK)</i>
+
+    This second entry is one for Mobius Trip and/or Hadron Kaleido - it's a bit more serious than my first. The idea behind this is, I suppose, what I believed the story behind MT&HK is from the [[album:mobius-trip-and-hadron-kaleido|album]], in particular [[No Release]] and [[track:lies-with-the-sea|Lies with the Sea]]. I see the entire concept as highly Romantic, with metaphorical emphasis on the feminine Nature (Hadron) vs. masculine Science (Mobius) development that was a popular topic of creative exploration in the 19th century.
+
+    Artwork has been used with permission by the awesome [[artist:tavia-morra|Tavia]]. I would also like to point out that this song is in no way officially endorsed by either [[artist:michael-guy-bowman|Bowman]], Tavia or What Pumpkin.
+
     <i>Aysha U. Farah:</i> ([[album:pesterquest-soundtrack|Pesterquest]] director/writer, [Twitter](https://web.archive.org/web/20200401185854/https://twitter.com/ayshaufarah/status/1245414693642088449))
 
     oh yeah that final track in the game is "embittered shore" by max wright! i'm really glad i finally got to use it, it's one of my favorite pieces of homestuck music
 
     when "unofficial" music becomes Official
+
+    <i>Tavia Morra:</i> (track artwork, [SoundCloud](https://soundcloud.com/mxwright/embittered-shore))
+
+    <img src="media/misc/embittered-shore.jpg" width="300">
+
+    <i>Tavia Morra:</i> (full size SoundCloud track artwork, [Tumblr](https://www.tumblr.com/seeyoutmorra/17291334167/heres-a-fun-fake-poster-i-made-for-a-mobius-trip), 2/8/2012)
+
+    <img src="media/misc/embittered-shore-full.jpg" width="300">
+
+    Here's a fun fake poster I made for a [[album:mobius-trip-and-hadron-kaleido]] concert. Still debating to make it full size for at-home printouts.
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 Track: Ye Flarey Gentlemen
 Artists: