lilith nov 2 general review + changelog

3 files changed, 15 insertions, 13 deletions

diff --git a/album/comfortable-bugs.yaml b/album/comfortable-bugs.yaml
index 1e79f811..82e19e0c 100644
--- a/album/comfortable-bugs.yaml
+++ b/album/comfortable-bugs.yaml
@@ -31,8 +31,8 @@ Commentary: |-
 
     Get comfortable.
 
-    <i>Tavia Morra:</i>
-    (<i>original cover art</i>)
+    <i>Tavia Morra:</i> (original cover art)
+
     <img src="media/misc/comfortable-bugs-alt.jpg" width="350">
 # Additional Files:
 # - Title: Album Credits
diff --git a/album/lofam3.yaml b/album/lofam3.yaml
index 5b1040a3..eeaa2f33 100644
--- a/album/lofam3.yaml
+++ b/album/lofam3.yaml
@@ -2058,6 +2058,8 @@ Commentary: |-
     My interest in doing Homestuck fanart has waned over the past few months, but I will always have a soft spot for the exiles no matter what. So it is only natural that I do goofy exile art for an [[Explore]] arrangement! Even though I was seriously burned out on art in general when I did this, I think it turned out okay. Goofy, happy exiles always turn out okay!
 ---
 Track: Ohgodboss
+Additional Names:
+- OhGodWhat Boss Battle Remix (working name)
 Artists:
 - Kevin Grant
 Duration: '3:20'
@@ -2087,13 +2089,13 @@ Commentary: |-
 
     I actually did two pieces of potential art for this, both featuring Dave and Jade fighting Bec Noir, since it seemed appropriate for an intense boss tune featuring a theme associated with Jade. There was a duller version of this as well as a more comic bookish one. A panel of friends agreed that this one read better, but it was a little flat, so I started brightening it and tweaking it, but still wanted to convey '8-bit', so I started playing around with a square brush throwing in this Darwina-esque square noise, which I thought looked pretty cool. It has been remarked that Jade firing an assault rifle in the air in front of a volcano is metal as shit. That's probably my favourite commentary on the image.)
 
-    <i>Kate Holden:</i> (WIP track art, and alternate track art, [Tumblr](https://faisdm.tumblr.com/post/52294281017/track-art-for-ohgodwhat-boss-battle-remix-by), 6/6/2013)
+    <i>Kate Holden:</i> ([Tumblr](https://faisdm.tumblr.com/post/52294281017/track-art-for-ohgodwhat-boss-battle-remix-by), 6/6/2013)
 
     Track Art for 'OhGodWhat Boss Battle Remix' by [[artist:kevin-grant|UWBW]] for Land of Fans and Music 3 (coming soon, I hope!!). Originally I drew this all with hard pixel edges:
 
     <img src="media/misc/ohgodboss-wip.png" width="350">
 
-    ...but it wasn't really 'working'. It looked a little flat and also a bit blobby up close (something I didn't like about my artwork for [[track:amongst-smiling-faces|'Amongst Smiling Faces']] on [[album:sburb-ost|SburbOST]]), which would have taken a fair bit of fiddling close up to fix. So I got out some smooth brushes and smoothed up a lot of the lines and added some glowy effects to soften things and bump the contrast. That looked nicer, but then I felt the link to the chiptune feel of the piece of music was lost. I decided to do something Darwinia-esque, got out a square brush and threw in a lot of square noise.
+    ...but it wasn't really 'working'. It looked a little flat and also a bit blobby up close (something I didn't like about my artwork for [[track:amongst-smiling-faces|'Amongst Smiling Faces']] on SburbOST), which would have taken a fair bit of fiddling close up to fix. So I got out some smooth brushes and smoothed up a lot of the lines and added some glowy effects to soften things and bump the contrast. That looked nicer, but then I felt the link to the chiptune feel of the piece of music was lost. I decided to do something Darwinia-esque, got out a square brush and threw in a lot of square noise.
 
     While I was feeling dissatsfied with the above image, before making those changes, I actually did a whole other piece of alternative track art though!
 
diff --git a/album/the-wanderers.yaml b/album/the-wanderers.yaml
index 22a66343..8082dcbc 100644
--- a/album/the-wanderers.yaml
+++ b/album/the-wanderers.yaml
@@ -256,7 +256,7 @@ Commentary: |-
 
     <i>Emi:</i> (track artist, [Tumblr](https://averyniceprince.tumblr.com/post/7604455794/httphomestuckbandcampcomtrackwe-walk), 7/14/2011)
 
-    Rachel asked me to draw for one of the tracks for the new album, and I honestly couldn't have been more honored!!! ;____;;; I had always wanted to draw the exiles, so this was a perfect opportunity hehe *U*
+    [[artist:rachel-locklin|Rachel]] asked me to draw for one of the tracks for the new album, and I honestly couldn't have been more honored!!! ;____;;; I had always wanted to draw the exiles, so this was a perfect opportunity hehe \*U\*
 ---
 Track: Requiem for an Exile
 Artists:
@@ -393,10 +393,7 @@ Lyrics: |-
     What a daring dream...
     (Just what do you think you're planning on doing with that ring?)<br>(Whatever it is forget it)<br>(The Slayer is miiiiiiiine)<br>(Now w8ke up)<br>(I said W88888888KE!)
 Commentary: |-
-    <i>Alex Rosetti:</i> (composer, [Tumblr](https://albatrossthesoup.tumblr.com/post/25964085415/commentary-for-what-a-daring-dream), 6/26/2012)
-    Here's my writeup for What a Daring Dream, as requested:
-
-    ------------
+    <i>Alex Rosetti:</i> (composer, [Tumblr](https://albatrossthesoup.tumblr.com/post/25964085415/commentary-for-what-a-daring-dream), excerpt, 6/26/2012)
 
     The Wanderers is my favorite Homestuck album. Its focused premise, interesting takes on a theme, and general aesthetic all appeal to me. Not to mention the fact that it contains some of the best songs in the Homestuck discography. This song is not one of those.
 
@@ -410,17 +407,20 @@ Commentary: |-
 
     Speaking of bonuses, [[artist:noot]] did the art we used for this track. It was one of a few pieces of track art that weren't commissioned. I happened to be looking around for artists and saw this, and I already knew it was perfect.
 
-    <i>Noot:</i> (track artist, [DeviantArt](https://www.deviantart.com/shikana/art/Dreams-of-red-and-sunder-215885568) full size artwork, 6/30/2011)
+    <i>Noot:</i> (full size artwork)
 
     <img src="media/misc/what-a-daring-dream-full.png" width="500" warning="blood (abstract)">
 
-    > A man is but the product of his thoughts. What he thinks, he becomes. - Mohandas K. Gandhi
+    <i>Noot:</i> (track artist, [DeviantArt](https://www.deviantart.com/shikana/art/Dreams-of-red-and-sunder-215885568), excerpt, 6/30/2011)
+
+    <b>Dreams of red and sunder</b>
+
+    A man is but the product of his thoughts. What he thinks, he becomes.<br>
+    \- Mohandas K. Gandhi
 
     This was probably the most ambitious thing I have done in quite a while. WV's dream sequence was always incredibly interesting to me, and what it implied. I wonder when we'll get to see how he gets out of being blown the smitheroons.
 
     Here's hoping it isn't very long before that bit of exposition up there becomes HORRIBLY OUTDATED.
-
-    Wayward Vagabond and Bec Noir are from MSPA and belong to Andrew Hussie
 ---
 Track: Nightmare
 Additional Names: