hammerkind commentary updates

2 files changed, 68 insertions, 29 deletions

diff --git a/album/hammerkind-ost.yaml b/album/hammerkind-ost.yaml
index 62b88b1..8fff06c 100644
--- a/album/hammerkind-ost.yaml
+++ b/album/hammerkind-ost.yaml
@@ -20,7 +20,9 @@ Groups:
 - Fandom
 Commentary: |-
     <i>Makin:</i> (wiki editor)
+
     This is the soundtrack for the Homestuck fangame [Hammerkind](http://web.archive.org/web/20130217073716/http://www.cloudcovergames.net/hammerkind/). It was composed by Stephen Maxwell, who made the game under the Cloud Cover Games label.
+
     Due to a lack of a proper soundtrack release, the album is hosted on YouTube and Archive.org. Additionally, the author was only able to recover four tracks, so [[Forgery]] and [[Beat the Game]] are recorded from the game itself (yes, I probably had to be the first person in a decade to beat all the levels and unlock all the secrets).
 ---
 Track: Beagle Aegis
@@ -33,8 +35,13 @@ Cover Artists:
 Art Tags:
 - Skaia
 Commentary: |-
-  <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i>
-  The MENU TUNE called "BEAGLE AEGIS" was also generally inspired by all the great work crafted by the MSPA MUSIC TEAM and WHAT PUMPKIN.
+    <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i> (in-game credits)
+
+    The MENU TUNE called "BEAGLE AEGIS" was also generally inspired by all the great work crafted by the MSPA MUSIC TEAM and WHAT PUMPKIN.
+
+    <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i> ([MSPA forums](https://web.archive.org/web/20100826164647/http://www.mspaforums.com:80/showthread.php?26512-Homestuck-Fan-Music-thread/page2&s=66b11e625cfee7a2a4191267582bdbea#post_message_3390859), excerpt)
+
+    Menu song (based on a background part of the main theme, so you can't really recognize any parts of Homestuck songs)
 ---
 Track: Impocalypse
 Duration: '3:03'
@@ -49,10 +56,17 @@ Art Tags:
 Referenced Tracks:
 - Guardian
 Commentary: |-
-  <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i>
-  [[track:guardian|"GUARDIAN"]] by [[artist:bill-bolin|BILL BOLIN]] (since removed from MSPA canon due to DRAMA) has been senselessly mutilated in order to make "IMPOCALYPSE".
-  <i>Makin:</i> (wiki editor)
-  This track plays during the IMPOCALYPSE game mode, which is a survival mode where you fight off waves of enemies.
+    <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i> (in-game credits)
+
+    [[track:guardian|"GUARDIAN"]] by [[artist:bill-bolin|BILL BOLIN]] (since removed from MSPA canon due to DRAMA) has been senselessly mutilated in order to make "IMPOCALYPSE".
+
+    <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i> ([MSPA forums](https://web.archive.org/web/20100826164647/http://www.mspaforums.com:80/showthread.php?26512-Homestuck-Fan-Music-thread/page2&s=66b11e625cfee7a2a4191267582bdbea#post_message_3390859), excerpt)
+
+    Impocalypse (based on [[track:guardian|Guardian]]. This one is a little messy, but it has its moments.)
+
+    <i>Makin:</i> (wiki editor)
+
+    This track plays during the IMPOCALYPSE game mode, which is a survival mode where you fight off waves of enemies.
 ---
 Track: Stairs of Skaia
 Duration: '2:48'
@@ -69,9 +83,16 @@ Referenced Tracks:
 - Skies of Skaia
 - Upward Movement (Dave Owns)
 Commentary: |-
-    <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i>
+    <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i> (in-game credits)
+
     [[track:skies-of-skaia|"SKIES OF SKAIA"]] by [[artist:mark-j-hadley|MARK HADLEY]] and [[track:upward-movement-dave-owns|"UPWARD MOVEMENT"]] by [[artist:kalibration|KALIBRATION]] were unsubtly crammed together to create "STAIRS TO SKAIA".
+
+    <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i> ([MSPA forums](https://web.archive.org/web/20100826164647/http://www.mspaforums.com:80/showthread.php?26512-Homestuck-Fan-Music-thread/page2&s=66b11e625cfee7a2a4191267582bdbea#post_message_3390859), excerpt)
+
+    Hammerkind main theme (based on [[track:upward-movement-dave-owns|Dave Fucking Owns/Upward Movement]] and [[track:skies-of-skaia|Skies of Skaia]]. This version, used in the game, is kind of a cross between the two I already posted in this thread, with a few other minor changes.)
+
     <i>Makin:</i> (wiki editor)
+
     This track plays during the main game mode STAIRS TO SKAIA, where you ascend/build past all the gates and fight imps to reach Skaia.
 ---
 Track: Explode (Candy)
@@ -87,10 +108,17 @@ Art Tags:
 Referenced Tracks:
 - Explore
 Commentary: |-
-  <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i>
-  [[track:explore|"EXPLORE"]] by [[artist:buzinkai|BUZINKAI]] was disrespected by the amateur duplication called "EXPLODE".
-  <i>Makin:</i> (wiki editor)
-  This is the final boss theme of the main game mode, where you fight Trickster John Egbert.
+    <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i> (in-game credits)
+
+    [[track:explore|"EXPLORE"]] by [[artist:buzinkai|BUZINKAI]] was disrespected by the amateur duplication called "EXPLODE".
+
+    <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i> ([MSPA forums](https://web.archive.org/web/20100826164647/http://www.mspaforums.com:80/showthread.php?26512-Homestuck-Fan-Music-thread/page2&s=66b11e625cfee7a2a4191267582bdbea#post_message_3390859), excerpt)
+
+    Explode (Candy) (based on [[track:explore|Explore]])
+
+    <i>Makin:</i> (wiki editor)
+
+    This is the final boss theme of the main game mode, where you fight Trickster John Egbert.
 ---
 Track: Forgery
 Duration: '0:51'
@@ -104,10 +132,13 @@ Art Tags:
 Referenced Tracks:
 - Chorale for Jaspers
 Commentary: |-
-  <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i>
-  [[track:chorale-for-jaspers|"CHORALE FOR JASPERS"]] by [[artist:michael-guy-bowman|MICHAEL GUY BOWMAN]] was twisted into "FORGERY".
-  <i>Makin:</i> (wiki editor)
-  This track plays during the "SECRET THING" special mode, which is a series of platformer levels where you chase Trickster John Egbert.
+    <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i> (in-game credits)
+
+    [[track:chorale-for-jaspers|"CHORALE FOR JASPERS"]] by [[artist:michael-guy-bowman|MICHAEL GUY BOWMAN]] was twisted into "FORGERY".
+
+    <i>Makin:</i> (wiki editor)
+
+    This track plays during the "SECRET THING" special mode, which is a series of platformer levels where you chase Trickster John Egbert.
 ---
 Track: Beat the Game
 Duration: '0:52'
@@ -120,7 +151,10 @@ Referenced Tracks:
 - Beatdown (Strider Style)
 - Showtime (Original Mix)
 Commentary: |-
-  <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i>
-  [[track:beatdown-strider-style|"BEATDOWN"]] by [[artist:curt-blakeslee|CURT BLAKESLEE]] and [[track:showtime-original-mix|"SHOWTIME"]] by [[artist:malcolm-brown|MALCOLM BROWN]] see hasty remixes in the track "BEAT THE GAME".
-  <i>Makin:</i> (wiki editor)
-  As the track title implies, this plays when you beat any of the game's modes.
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+    <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i> (in-game credits)
+
+    [[track:beatdown-strider-style|"BEATDOWN"]] by [[artist:curt-blakeslee|CURT BLAKESLEE]] and [[track:showtime-original-mix|"SHOWTIME"]] by [[artist:malcolm-brown|MALCOLM BROWN]] see hasty remixes in the track "BEAT THE GAME".
+
+    <i>Makin:</i> (wiki editor)
+
+    As the track title implies, this plays when you beat any of the game's modes.
diff --git a/flashes.yaml b/flashes.yaml
index a056036..57e0f80 100644
--- a/flashes.yaml
+++ b/flashes.yaml
@@ -4953,19 +4953,24 @@ Featured Tracks:
 URLs:
 - http://web.archive.org/www.cloudcovergames.net/hammerkind/
 Commentary: |-
-    <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i> ([Official website](https://web.archive.org/web/20130217173617/http://www.cloudcovergames.net/hammerkind/))
-    » Fight shale imps to collect grist, to build, to climb!
-    » 6-7 different powerups that you can purchase (using shale, of course)!
-    » Special unlockable game modes!
-    » At-home multiplayer! (No online functionality yet, sorry.)
-    » Secrets!
-    » Tons of (midi) music inspired by songs from Homestuck canon!
-    » Lots of love for the first three acts!
-    » Extra-canon boss battle!
+    <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i> ([official website](https://web.archive.org/web/20130217173617/http://www.cloudcovergames.net/hammerkind/), excerpt)
+
+    » Fight shale imps to collect grist, to build, to climb!<br>
+    » 6-7 different powerups that you can purchase (using shale, of course)!<br>
+    » Special unlockable game modes!<br>
+    » At-home multiplayer! (No online functionality yet, sorry.)<br>
+    » Secrets!<br>
+    » Tons of (midi) music inspired by songs from Homestuck canon!<br>
+    » Lots of love for the first three acts!<br>
+    » Extra-canon boss battle!<br>
     » So many surprises. All of the surprises.
-    <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i> ([Tumblr post](https://3phen.tumblr.com/post/5589239614/hammerkind-game-announcement))
+
+    <i>Stephen Maxwell:</i> ([Tumblr post](https://3phen.tumblr.com/post/5589239614/hammerkind-game-announcement), excerpt)
+
     Hammerkind is a unique little fangame that I've put a lot of time and love into. It's the first thing of this size I've completed, and I'm really excited to finally let everyone play it!
+
     Hammerkind features original game mechanics inspired by Homestuck. Fight imps to gather Build Grist to build, to climb through the seven gates to reach Skaia!  This mostly takes place as if in Act 3, though some secrets diverge from this concept if you can find them. If you stick with the game, you can unlock quite a lot of extra content.
+
     Note that Hammerkind has weird physics, and will not function like most platformers or brawlers. The jump has no air-control, John accelerates quickly while running, and the way attacks work is odd.  A large part of the game is learning to use this to your advantage!
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